wireman2011
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« on: March 13, 2011, 09:44:07 AM » |
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may we last forever
rocket on out there
past the dog star
shining so bright
on a summer's night
may we last forever
can you see the look
in her brown eyes
laid back & confident
waiting for the next same
old thing once again
may we last forever
resplendent in that
o say can't you see
& would somebody
pinch me, because I
do believe it's all
beyond belief
may we last forever
then dine on the end
of time, watch the
rabbit in the moon
sing an old timey tune
may we last forever
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« Reply #1 on: March 13, 2011, 03:00:54 PM » |
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"last forever"-central on everyone's mind after having witnessed like no other in history, the deluge of nature's tragedies. nice music here, Wire!
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wireman2011
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« Reply #2 on: March 13, 2011, 06:27:52 PM » |
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thanks bardo.....impermanence the ultimate noble truth......
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« Reply #3 on: March 13, 2011, 06:54:48 PM » |
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smooth as perry como.
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wireman2011
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« Reply #4 on: March 14, 2011, 11:17:50 PM » |
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funnyyou should say that dino...i did several versions with music and it kinds reminds me of wired sly stone.....
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« Reply #5 on: March 16, 2011, 02:01:40 AM » |
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yeh, could be a nice funky riff. i'm there!
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wireman2011
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« Reply #6 on: March 16, 2011, 02:19:43 AM » |
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Light Haven
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« Reply #7 on: March 16, 2011, 07:04:18 PM » |
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i like the poem very much until the last stanza. don't think it is as strong as the rest.
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« Reply #8 on: March 16, 2011, 11:45:02 PM » |
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Good stuff
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all rights reserved
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« Reply #9 on: March 17, 2011, 02:02:29 AM » |
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This is so cool, I love it.
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