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« on: September 28, 2010, 02:12:24 AM » |
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I read but still there’s
something I’m missing I don’t get it I’m not comprehending
hidden messages innuendo veiled comparisons
twists of meaning metaphors layer upon layer
rambling allusions similes dancing around
I don’t get the message too often don’t see the big picture
when it’s all said and done I don’t get it what are you saying?
but still I read
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« Reply #1 on: September 28, 2010, 03:03:40 AM » |
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effectively conveyed sentiments - well done!
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« Reply #2 on: September 28, 2010, 03:13:05 AM » |
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I'm sure you are like a lot of us, I know I miss a ton. Part I blame on my lack of formal education (both poetic and general) and part, I think, is sloppy writers who just vomit their brains on a page and think themselves artists. Interestingly, who's to say they are not. Everything in poetry is so subjective.
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war is not the answer - Marvin Gaye but it's not the question either - ML
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« Reply #3 on: September 28, 2010, 07:59:53 AM » |
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I miss a ton too. worse, I read things in. I suppose it's unavoidable.
emel-- "vomit their brains" ha. now there's an image..
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« Reply #4 on: September 28, 2010, 11:45:45 AM » |
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Ha! I like vomit their brains, too best line in the thread!
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« Reply #5 on: September 28, 2010, 11:46:31 AM » |
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as with all forms of artistic expression, once it is released to the public, it's fair game, and critics spend inordinate amounts of time trying to be the guy that knows definitively what the artist meant...what a crock.....sometimes the artist doesn't know.....I love the mystery myself.....with others work, as well as my own......occasionally I'll reread a poem I wrote five years ago, and for the first time get where it came from.....
what's cool, is we seem to be constantly assimilating this collective consciousness, from people compelled to express themselves, which oddly turns out to be the only ones that matter, 'cause if you live a life of playing it close to the vest, you're going to die with those thoughts ( not sure if they rise from the grave, float in the stratosphere, and fall in someones ear one day while they're lying on beach )
from my perspective, I don't want everything to to clear....if it were all cut and dried, I go nuts.........
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« Reply #6 on: September 28, 2010, 11:50:29 AM » |
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@saw ... huh???
Just kidding. Sometimes just the flow and sound of the words is enough for me to like a poem.
Is it impolite to ask? what does that mean or where are you coming from?
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« Reply #7 on: September 28, 2010, 11:51:44 AM » |
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i wish people would sometimes.
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« Reply #8 on: September 28, 2010, 04:09:34 PM » |
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Well done! There is much in poetry that I overlook or don't understand. If 10 people read a poem...you may get 10 different understandings.
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I'm following many roads, using poetry as my map.
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« Reply #9 on: September 29, 2010, 10:25:19 PM » |
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I feel like I'm in good company ... ok ... like company anyway.
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