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« on: September 25, 2010, 05:06:47 AM » |
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Stinkbug - Cinquain in 3 Forms
stink bug
seeking entry
clinging to screens and doors
determined to find a way in
can do
zombie
armored intruders
impervious to poisons
no cure, no relief
bugged
invader
stupid slow
trolling, buzzing, searching
pacman of the insect world
stinkbug
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« Reply #1 on: September 25, 2010, 05:23:09 AM » |
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I smelled one of those for the first time yesterday, actually I thought it smelled kinda flowery and sweet
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« Reply #2 on: September 25, 2010, 01:16:38 PM » |
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the dead ones, I think, smell like talcum powder. I've never crushed a live one.
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« Reply #3 on: September 26, 2010, 03:59:19 PM » |
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can do - that kills me!
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« Reply #4 on: September 26, 2010, 05:15:08 PM » |
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my house is crawling with these things......it seems a bit supernatural, they have appeared in every room, on bath towel, in my newspaper.......bet they'd look really menacing blown up a couple thousand times, marching into baltimore crushing automobiles.....can't wait for the movie.......but til then they gotta go !
good cinquains !
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« Reply #5 on: September 26, 2010, 10:12:50 PM » |
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thanks guys
they covered my computer room window screen one day, really couldn't see out
it was a Stephen King moment
creepy things
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« Reply #6 on: September 27, 2010, 12:30:57 PM » |
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They are an army
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« Reply #7 on: September 27, 2010, 03:11:15 PM » |
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Nicely done here, dannen. Fine description well captures the beastie!
My wife hates these things and other creepy crawlies and I am often called into action in the evening to deal with them.
Chris
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« Reply #8 on: September 27, 2010, 07:28:56 PM » |
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Good man Chris, my husband has a no tolerance policy with the litle buggers! He's on the warpath when we get home from work and if I spot one I'm to get him. He wants the pleasure of wiping them out. He can have it.
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« Reply #9 on: September 29, 2010, 06:16:29 AM » |
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I like this. I don't like them!
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« Reply #10 on: September 29, 2010, 10:23:28 PM » |
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thanks folk poet
I can see out of my window screen, it must be getting too cold or wet for the little armored creatures.
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