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« on: March 07, 2009, 09:59:49 PM » |
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Civilization's Fall, from the Animals' Perspective
Hey, Man, you've had it all your own way,
until your boondoggle Wall Street collapsed.
As you try to hitch from New York to LA,
civilization as you know it has prolapsed.
Man, you stole chunks from our lives,
took liberties, hung us from trees
in the name of progress--what jive!
Thought you could steal with such ease.
Chatter chatter: mankind prattles on
though your life's imploding around you.
Though we ain't got no blackberries, no
opposable thumbs, that's it for you, chum.
Christopher T. George
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« Last Edit: March 08, 2009, 06:27:32 PM by ChrisGeorge »
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doreen peri
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« Reply #1 on: March 07, 2009, 10:28:50 PM » |
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nice rhyme and rhythm, chris! pretty accurate assessment too  |
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ChrisGeorge
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« Reply #2 on: March 07, 2009, 10:51:31 PM » |
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Thanks, Doreen.
Chris
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« Reply #3 on: March 07, 2009, 11:16:18 PM » |
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gosh, that final word could summarize it alone, Chris. i remember the nasty tempo in the early 80's, the self-help get rich books, the slips of the tongue about the working class, Trump's hair to success, luxury bathrooms, gold faucets, a wellness that would never end, enough coke in their noses to clog an elephant's nostril, the stupor that would later be our raises they pissed away, the boats on the bay a block long, the chunks stolen from our lives. now it's even score, and this poem is part of an endless sort that will haunt them to the end. good write!
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« Reply #4 on: March 08, 2009, 12:00:25 AM » |
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hey chris, couldn't help but think of Gary Larsen, his uncanny eye for drawing cartoons from the perspective of the animal, which would nearly always make the reader worried about the stupidity of humans.....this is a clever peek from those same eyes...I like the ambiguity of the last word, chum...which could be friend or could be shark bait....good stuff
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moe, larry, cheese....no, Limburger !
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ChrisGeorge
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« Reply #5 on: March 08, 2009, 01:21:41 AM » |
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Ha ha, thanks Steve. I hadn't thought about shark bait. I like comparison to Larsen.
Cheers, mate.
Chris
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« Reply #6 on: March 09, 2009, 04:39:46 PM » |
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Chris, the last two lines are killer.
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"This boy is Ignorance. This girl is Want. Beware them both, and all of their degree, but most of all beware this boy, for on his brow I see that written which is Doom, unless the writing be erased."
Charles Dickens
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ChrisGeorge
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« Reply #7 on: March 10, 2009, 09:46:18 AM » |
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Thank, Jude.
Chris
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