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[constantine]

my women of the silver screen
don't know what it is, but
i love them so
i really do
not just the stars, but
the extras and walk ons
the incidentals
they drive me nuts
they really do
i try to figure them out
what brought them to that particular point
you know - their story
story within a story within a story
i try to catch them in revealing moments
when they break the illusion
when they're out of character
it happens you know
it really does
if you look hard enough
you can see through anything
and time loses itself within the focus
and they could be sitting right next to you
for all that it would matter
no difference, same deal
for all i know they may be looking at me

[CoolJude]

You are so slick, we will have to keep two eyes on you or you may just dissolve on the screen. As usual, I just love it. I find myself doing the same thing, I always want the back story.

[constantine]

thank you, jude. i've had this idea for years now, but never got the feel for it until tonight.

[amything]

i wonder what everyones story is but thats far too overwhelming at times to think about all at once

[BardmasterUB05]

oh, I like this, boss! it's quite romantic, and reminds me a little of the old flicks I've been watching during the day recuperating. cool stuff.

time loses itself within the focus

good line

[Slazinger]

I only do this when watching pornography but it's quite accurate.

[constantine]

thanks amy, mcmaestro, and mr. slaz.

[Lightning Rod]

great theme dino

the screen definitely has two sides

here is a song I wrote on the same theme

http://studioeight.tv/musicpost/LR/garbowanda.mp3

Where did Garbo Go?

[Leo]

i dream about women all the time

[constantine]

thanks leo and lrod.

perhaps, lrod, you should state what you believe the theme to be before claiming to have written something with the same.

[azure]

A look behind the ones we see on the screen, a very cool poem about Hollywood. (and how sweet of you to write about my birthplace! )

[saw]

holy smokes, susan you were born in hollywood ?...I never met anyone from there...Another smooth ride Brother D....I fantasize all the time about what makes someone tick, especially women...every man needs a hobby, and that's mine...
I've always loved airports, the arrivals, the departures, this fascinating mix of garb, of pomp and circumstance that parades just for me, and it is relaxing to me to just imagine what they are all about...I am a dyed in the wool people watcher..
the movies are the quintessential forum to study personalities, you even have slo-motion, if you want to get a better look.......nice work, bobba louie.....

[constantine]

 thanks steve and susan. it is about hollywood in a sense; for me, i see it as a metaphor for aspects of human behavior - that there is no essential difference between the screen of the movie or the screen in our mind. as in hollywood so in the real world.

[theirishsea]

In one way the writing is very simple---straight-forward vernacular and the repetition gives the poem immediacy, maybe a little urgency. And what is being said is so unpretentious but true---the style matches the subject. You are talking to the reader in plain everyday language and suggest so much by it. This is really a good poem. I would have no hesitancy in putting it in an anthology. Excellent.

[constantine]

thanks dan. i am glad that you liked it.