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« Reply #15 on: November 09, 2008, 12:12:37 AM » |
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YES GAME ON I LOVE THOSE THINGS
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« Reply #16 on: November 09, 2008, 12:21:11 AM » |
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dip them in coffee, slo, i've cracked more teeth chomping down on them. my dentist loves when i feast on biscotti.
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« Reply #17 on: November 09, 2008, 12:37:22 PM » |
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i like it with english tea or a black tea. but you're right about the biting (chomping) part. you might break your jaw bone lol.
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« Reply #18 on: November 09, 2008, 12:53:42 PM » |
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Ha ha...so you're a tea person? Coffee isn't good enough? That doesn't entitle you to any liberties, why haven't you edited this poem? Don't make me hurt you. Ask, Don Dino, how I torture him when he does his slacker routine. There is no room for that in this art. Edit until your eyes, and hands hurt! Report back to my office, Slow Poet, when completed. you're welcome
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« Reply #19 on: November 09, 2008, 01:08:35 PM » |
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I like the poem myself, sometimes it is good to read a poem made like a patchwork quilt, that's what this reminds me of! So you tick off a few Scottsmen, they are always fighting over something anyway, gives them an excuse for another round...lol
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I'm following many roads, using poetry as my map.
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« Reply #20 on: November 09, 2008, 01:29:55 PM » |
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Don't take the easy road, Slow Poet, edit this baby, and, get out the red pencil. Rid all needless weight. Excess weight can be problematic. I'll protest until it's done! Don't believe commentary, even that is weighty, and, avoid karma at all costs. you're welcome
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« Reply #21 on: November 09, 2008, 03:41:41 PM » |
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Okay here's the situation, when i do make changes to this piece it won't be many. it turned out to be a scrambled omelet for a reason. my mind state at the moment wasn't stable therefore this poem is meant to be off balance. lol. my changes may change the feel of the confusion (controlled chaos) that made this poem in the first place. never mind the factor of time. i write when i'm at work primarily. hence the long periods of being logged on to this site. i thank you all for your time and efforts. i'm glad you all seem to enjoy this piece.
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« Reply #22 on: November 09, 2008, 03:50:59 PM » |
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inexcusable, slow poet. you're not off my radar yet. get back to editing this poem. no slackers!
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« Reply #23 on: November 09, 2008, 04:22:35 PM » |
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what's wrong with haggis?
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« Reply #24 on: November 09, 2008, 04:33:59 PM » |
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yea, slow poet, see what you started? where's my edited version.
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« Reply #25 on: November 09, 2008, 04:54:52 PM » |
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I was off in my own world when this first posted but I like the title because it fits the discord. Most of my days(and some of my nights) are spent like the lines in this poem. I do so like biscotti dunked in any drinking fluid.
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"This boy is Ignorance. This girl is Want. Beware them both, and all of their degree, but most of all beware this boy, for on his brow I see that written which is Doom, unless the writing be erased."
Charles Dickens
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« Reply #26 on: November 09, 2008, 05:05:44 PM » |
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BardmasterUB05
Maybe you didn't read my reply changes will be minimal if any.
constantine
WOW!! there's nothing wrong with haggis it's just not my thing.
BardmasterUB05
trust me when i say this to you, trying to move a mountain with a firecracker will take longer than a life time lol.
CoolJude
i'm glad you could relate. as far as biscotti goes be careful what you dunking it in. lol
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« Reply #27 on: November 09, 2008, 05:27:35 PM » |
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don't give me that minimalist rubbish, slow poet, this is far from being that. I can move a mountain with my pinky, wanna see? no slackers!
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« Reply #28 on: November 09, 2008, 05:51:23 PM » |
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sorry superman you have no powers when it comes to this red giant sun lol
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« Reply #29 on: November 09, 2008, 06:11:31 PM » |
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sorry superman you have no powers when it comes to this red giant sun lol
oh...being a wiseguy on me, hey? we'll see. i'm eating haggis as we speak. I plucked the offal from a lamb nearby. it's quite good |
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