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[Slow Poet]

Some people spend their whole life worrying about what’s fair,
If life was meant to be fair why is suffering everywhere,
They complain when their life is full of joy,
Yet they’re not happy inside so they’re looking for new toys,
Producers, consumers, most spend their life being the latter,
Meanwhile spending their life eating foods worst than Scottish haggis,
Nazi America, step out of line police will grab us,
I write left, but speak right, I learned that from strategic masters,
Generalization to a congregation, call it preaching to the masses,
Went from being blind to having sight,
Light Amplification by Stimulated Emission of Radiation,
Provides you with sight no need for glasses,
But that same technology allow you to shoot in the dark with no second chances,
Which sells more, if all cars take you to the same places,
Why most of you buy a new car you can’t afford, simple no justification,
America the Great, shot down for money, scandals, and powers,
To the children of the world they say the world ours,
But when they’re done they know the world will be sour,
They search for new planets to colonize in order to maintain their power,
Rich or poor, the blind get lifted off flowers,
Young men watch videos of a young woman taking golden showers,
When will we know the truth about the Twin Towers,
In this world the only rights a man has is life and death,
Until abortion clinics took their rights to have that a first breath,
The world is sick worse than a cancerous tumor,
We pretend to know the cure yet that’s nothing but a rumor….

[saw]

I don't know, slow  ...this one is all over the place ....some good ideas...could be tightened up perhaps, but feels like 3 or 4 different poems......maybe a good title would be Random Rap........peace....

[Slow Poet]

the rambles of a mad man lol that's me i'm very upside inside outside today lol.  i'm having a terrible day and i guess it shows in my work. 

[constantine]

it's a pastiche of random outrages that reminds me of home. untitled (you name it) is a perfect title. i think it's cool.

[Slow Poet]

lol that's funny because i put that as a title for someone to name it.  i can't have two named untitled( you name it ) lol.  anyways thank you as always you're truly a gentleman and a scholar

Slow

[doreen peri]

title suggestions

"America, the Great"

"Land of the Brave, Home of the Costly"

"Scandals, Power, Consumerism, & Life on the Outskirts of Cyberspace"

"Oh Say Can You See?"

[BardmasterUB05]

Slow, name it: LOL in a Scottish Eatery?, though, be careful, the Scots have been kicking ass as far back as the late 1200's. par this down a bit, and I think you may have a much better poem. Good luck.

[Slow Poet]

thank you all i appreciate the advice and the titles

slow

[Slow Poet]

i like that for a title whatcha think

[BardmasterUB05]

My Man! Works for me, though you still haven't pared it down. If you make a bundle off of this, I'm sending Luca to collect. Don't make me angry. 


I'm honored! you're welcome

[Slow Poet]

thanks again i like the feel of the combination of titles.  i'm at work so give me time to chop and screw the poem lol.  thank you one more time for the blessing.

Slow

[constantine]

i like the original title or just you name it. but this one isn't bad

[BardmasterUB05]

thank you, Don Dino. now watch this guy carefully, or he'll nab your gif.

[Slow Poet]

lol i would like to thank you all.  you've been some of the best asisstance/editors/promoters i could ever ask for lol. 

[BardmasterUB05]

do you like biscotti, Slow Poet? It's nothing like haggis.