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wiselilraccoon
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« on: July 31, 2008, 02:06:53 PM »

This is not a promise,
just a flaky muse:
What if I gave you peaches, cut to the pit just
at the moment of sugaring? What if
you shivered when the juice tracked your chin,
amused to be sticky again?
What if a moment were enough?

I can’t say, but what if I showed up with
wildflowers and you’d just been pondering that
empty corner in your kitchen? Would they be
just perfect or are you allergic

to wildflowers

or gifts that show up, riding a beaming smile as if
you’d asked the universe a question? Be careful of
requests; Choose your words like a lawyer.
The universe might just make you divorce that
habit your wear...out.

Funny how the badminton shuttle rights itself with
each hit. Funny, the sight of you, chattering and
restringing my racket...again, endless patience and
contentment at twenty paces. My limitless listening.

My serve...

What if the night sounds of my house became
familiar and you slept eight hours, your hand, food on
the plate of mine, feeding us rest?

You could plant tomatoes and I could weed when
I remember. Wineberries, catnip, tearthumb. Just
a notion. Could be shiny.

I have to laugh that we can’t seem to get more than
five volies of that shuttle off before I miss. I’m willing
to practice but the weight of your gaze on my hair
is distracting. What if I got the rhythm?

Your serve?

--Wren Tuatha http://www.HippieChickDiaries.com/
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« Reply #1 on: July 31, 2008, 02:14:24 PM »

Welcome back. A nice poem. I'll have to read it again to extract all the nuances and follow all the turns of the poem exactly, but it is very enjoyable on a first reading---and sophisticatedly rich.

I hope you stay a little while here and share more poems with us.

I know you live---or at least you spend time there---at the commune. It shows in your varied and rich imagery.
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« Reply #2 on: July 31, 2008, 02:38:11 PM »

nice to see your work again, wren.....the opening stanza is a poem on its own....and the rest of the body
delves into those unanswerable questions we ponder when we're daydreaming...nice images and food for
thought........I like your observations.....peace....steve.........
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« Reply #3 on: August 01, 2008, 07:36:30 PM »

provocative work - as usual. nice to read you again.
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« Reply #4 on: August 02, 2008, 02:50:08 AM »

This is really a great poem, you have so many wonderful phrases throughout it.  Good to see you!
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« Reply #5 on: August 05, 2008, 02:14:12 PM »

Thanks, everyone, for your kind comments! Sorry I can't spend more time on the site these days but I'm working long hours until October. The life of a hippie chick!!! Wish I had time to attend readings and get to know you all better!

Wren Tuatha http://www.HippieChickDiaries.com/
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« Reply #6 on: August 06, 2008, 02:57:39 PM »

very romantic. I love your thoughts. what if I made the right turns when it was right to, what if I do when I need to, don't we all wonder.
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