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« on: April 29, 2008, 03:24:29 AM » |
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buttercup and daffodil
ring around the rosy
octomek octomek
pocket full of poesy
faster pussycat
kill kill kill
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« Reply #1 on: April 29, 2008, 03:30:24 AM » |
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I enjoyed the disconnected rhyme at the end. What a killer, Buttercup!
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« Reply #2 on: April 29, 2008, 03:38:28 AM » |
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it took years of writing, rewriting, revision after revision; i thought i would go mad wrestling with my own inadequacy, but at long last i have said what i've been trying to express for years. now i can finally rest. adieu.
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« Reply #3 on: April 29, 2008, 03:52:54 AM » |
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lol but I hardly knew ye  |
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war is not the answer - Marvin Gaye
but it's not the question either - ML
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« Reply #4 on: April 29, 2008, 03:55:23 AM » |
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Don't sweat over endings in lines.
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« Reply #5 on: April 29, 2008, 04:04:32 AM » |
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i am filled with remorse and guilt. but tomorrow is another day. yahoo!!
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« Reply #6 on: April 29, 2008, 11:16:04 AM » |
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god forgive me for my transgressions.
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« Reply #7 on: April 29, 2008, 11:57:57 AM » |
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Interesting. Captures something of cat and man. Not sure what "octomek" is. Your cat's name, perhaps? Google brings up some wild possibilities. Uhhh, there's that man Bush again. . . . http://www.google.com/search?hl=en&q=octomek |
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« Reply #8 on: April 29, 2008, 11:58:18 AM » |
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Only the fearful have transgressions.
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« Reply #9 on: April 29, 2008, 12:02:14 PM » |
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i used to call my little brother octomek - why i don't know. faster pussycat kill kill kill comes from a b-movie of the 1950's.
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« Reply #10 on: April 29, 2008, 05:11:22 PM » |
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how dare you refer to Russ Meyer's work as B movie ....the man was a genius...well okay, maybe not...but he did have an eye for voluptuous talent ....your poetry is a-list, however...poor buttercup...so misunderstood..
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moe, larry, cheese....no, Limburger !
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« Reply #11 on: April 29, 2008, 08:55:11 PM » |
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you said it. if i've told you once i've told you twice - it's mister buttercup. sheesh!
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« Reply #12 on: April 29, 2008, 10:21:34 PM » |
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Loved it.......but I highly doubt we will be hearing the children singing this one.....yet again......
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I'm following many roads, using poetry as my map.
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« Reply #13 on: April 29, 2008, 10:23:15 PM » |
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you never know - kids say the darndest things.
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« Reply #14 on: April 30, 2008, 02:03:29 AM » |
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Yea, for instance, they sometimes repeat, redrum, redrum, redrum, , causing nightmares in grownups.
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