HaroHalola
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« on: January 19, 2008, 04:20:19 PM » |
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Lady Holi'Day -
"I Love You, Porgie/Don't let
them take Me/..." her lush
sad-voice, coarse & closed
& the '40's "Strange Fruit" All
and I am White, Shame!
H.e.m.
7.16.MMvi.
(Revised- To Haiku/Senryu - 1.19.MMviii.)
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constantine
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« Reply #1 on: January 20, 2008, 02:17:33 PM » |
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i think that the poem condenses by virtue of your choice of form, but the density of the elements involved would lend themselves to more exposition especially with your gift for language.
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« Reply #2 on: January 20, 2008, 02:21:42 PM » |
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I concur. We shall riot if there is no more to this, H.H.!
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HaroHalola
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« Reply #3 on: January 20, 2008, 02:58:38 PM » |
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C. - I am always appreciative of your cogent, insightfilled Comments; truth-be-told, this Piece (as noted) was expanded, so you are viewing the morph from a "condensed" Version. TY for the acknowledgement to linguistic prowess, this is humbling; though, by the very nature of the subject matter's heinousness, to my perception, minimalism was the facilitated motif, to wit, after one bite of the richest cheescake (flippant analogy), better, perhaps, after the initial gore of say, a Bruce Willis "Adventure", what follows is cheatingly, panderingly, boringly redundant "OverKill." And not to incur anyone's Ecumenical wrath (Jeez, & It is Sunday!, perhaps some ears will be tinged & stung en masse), Gibson's "tour-of-Forced" was flagello-bludgeoning, hardly Mel-lo, to be underplaying. H.E./H.e.m.
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« Reply #4 on: January 20, 2008, 03:05:18 PM » |
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how'd gibson get into this. his name has soured my black coffee. don't do that to me ever again haro!
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HaroHalola
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« Reply #5 on: January 20, 2008, 03:14:35 PM » |
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C. - Jeez, sorry! Need to maintain a Mel-lo tone, here; is it OK to mention the guitars of the same appellation? H.E./H.e.m.
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« Reply #6 on: January 20, 2008, 03:19:37 PM » |
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Bard - TY for the Comment; let us fashion our cudgels & swords into pruning hooks & plowshares, & carry big sticks! "It's been going-on for 10,000 Years!" Mandalama - H.E./H.e.m.
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« Reply #7 on: January 20, 2008, 03:29:06 PM » |
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yes
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« Reply #8 on: January 20, 2008, 03:41:42 PM » |
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C. - Good! Stay Tuned! H.E./H.e.m.
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« Reply #9 on: January 20, 2008, 05:47:08 PM » |
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Trying to address this piece is difficult. Too many issues keep intruding--I know what you mean about wanting the minimal, out of a respect for the subject matter, but the issues do seem to be demanding a longer statement, maybe? Hyphenating "sad-voice" strangely effective, as is simple use of the word "closed".
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