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e-mily is one hot electronochick,
e-ric a matinee idol cyberhunk....
there lives together are text-book,
fulfillment lies in the palm pilot
of their hands, flourishing in a web
of DSL excitement.
They met when e-mily did a lap top dance
for e-ric at the wi-fi gentlemen's club.
The reality is.....they are virtually
a perfect link.
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moe, larry, cheese....no, Limburger !
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« Reply #1 on: January 07, 2008, 06:18:39 PM » |
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Fun piece, Saw, clever.
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« Reply #2 on: January 07, 2008, 06:49:23 PM » |
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Fun, indeed, saw! I would like to see you add four more lines, and turn it into an e-sonnet, or 14 line chain link. Solid play in this theme throughout. Liked:
lap top dance...
wi-fi gentlemen's club
There's a future screenplay here. Just don't hit a wrong key, and delete it...
Throw some profanity, and have a cursor.
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« Reply #3 on: January 07, 2008, 07:37:48 PM » |
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Yes, Yes. Very clever poem. Have to ask a dumb question though. DSL? Direct Service(?) Line (or Link?) ?
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« Reply #4 on: January 07, 2008, 08:26:33 PM » |
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filled with bon mots. i hate to say clever, but what is one to do?
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« Reply #5 on: January 07, 2008, 10:11:43 PM » |
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LOL Made me laugh, very cool, saw.
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« Reply #6 on: January 07, 2008, 11:01:34 PM » |
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Ya know I did this scene in the mid-seventies with a lil hottie down in D.C., talk about some wild memories.....pre cyber flyte but still wired back then.....this one is most entertaining steve......
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« Reply #7 on: January 08, 2008, 10:02:06 AM » |
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thanx carol, mike, dan, dino, susan and mark....have an e-xtraordinary day !
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